Erotic Poetry

Hey all :) I've been trying my hand at some erotic poetry (pornetry anyone?!) but I'm a terrible judge of my own work! Please tell me what you think.

Serenity

You are my peace.

I am still, muscles taut as a silken bow string, a delicious insidious ache.

Every second you are inside me, moulded molten flesh colliding, entangling, merging.

The intensity of beautiful serenity, clear cloudless view, the endless echo of a stolen gasp.

Resonating co-mingled pulse as bodies surge and writhe in unison.

Suspended. Weightless and pinned in place. Caught. Held.

Bliss

Slow breaths, smoke wraiths enfold;
Ephemeral fog, damp as morning dew clinging to naked skin.
Traces cool, remnant of a whispered susurration of less than a word.
Exhalation a ghost trail across flesh. Shiver.
Aching; arching against touch, blindly seeking cascades of shimmering shattered glass,
Showering across every perfect inch.
Gripping hard heat; Slick and begging, lying wantonly exposed; flushed and ready.
Muffled gasp, pliant muscles flex and drive, supple spine slippery under white knuckled fingers.
Fluid movement conjoined in mutual need;
Molten silver flows and pools, loosens gravities tether obliterates everything but the moment.
Peaks.
A flash of absolute stillness, flare of star bright static silencing synapses.
Writhing and gasping undone and overwhelmed.

Restrained

Luscious leather tight on flushed flesh

Teasing torturous tongue trails

Across sweat slick shivering skin.

Pleasure pools, ebbs and pulls, twists and tugs, irresistible force.

Beautiful lip bitten begging, hands grasping, breath gasping.

Flash of a fractured gaze, body bound tight with taut trembling tension.

Soft seductive silent scream.

oooh- i do like a bit of poetry. especially the erotic stuff. have u found yourself a poetry site to post on yet? i like Bliss- how the words move together.

 Yes. I like them a lot. I like to feel the flow of poetry and yours has it and such a nice pace and rhythm too. Bliss is a good one (but shattered glass is not something I would like to think about in the heat of the moment - :p)

 silvaa, I love it! I like the use of alliteration in your third piece, it just flows beautifully.

My bf writes poetry for me, I treasure it more that any gift he could buy me.Hope you write more for us to read:)xx

mm very good please believe in yourself..those three poems were so beautifully different and i love your use of such ephemeral words like a lucid dream that we could imagine..keep up the good work..:)

mm very good please believe in yourself..those three poems were so beautifully different and i love your use of such ephemeral words like a lucid dream that we could imagine..keep up the good work..:)

I have to say that these are honestly excellent! Such great use of words and, although I thought of them as cheesy until now, the use of alliteration was perfect. Makes me want to try writing poetry again...

 Brilliant! The fluidity of each line flows into the next wonderfully....I agree with ju, my favourite is Bliss.

Keep up the good work.

Love them! <3

Great work :)